KANE, Roxanne Baby

[wizard]

...Roxanne Baby Kane *
*Go fix your own God Damn problems!*

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...basics*

name Tammy Cara Kane
nickname Roxanne Baby Kane is her name now ~ See history
age 26
gender Female
grade Adult
hometown San Francisco
sexuality Straight
personification The Wizard
status DORMANT
face claim Deborah Ann Woll

...appearance*

hair color Red
eye color blue
build Skinny with very little muscle tone
height five foot eight inchs
clothing style Casual (nothing special)
distinctive traits N/A

...personal*

personality
Tammy was always an energetic girl, though she was never able to concentrate on school work or any kind of work what so ever. She was someone that was said to have no skill sets. Which was very true, she was never good at anything as child. She was spoken down to by her parents while her twin was miss perfect. It was true, she was not good at any one thing she had small skill sets for many things though. In time she became very good at cleaning and cooking, but her parents always overlooked that. They thought you had to be extra smart, like her sister Roxanne, and be as beautiful as her too.

Going into high school she and her twin sister became even more different, even though they both suddenly became very popular. Tammy was a cheerleader, finally having grown into her own good looks she and her sister became hard to tell apart and people were constantly unable to tell one from the other. The only time they would be told apart was when Tammy was in her cheerleader costume and Roxanne was in her decathlons shirt. Two different crowds and two different people as high school ended they went there ways never speaking for years. Tammy all but shunned from the family was left out on her own and went into a life as a cage dancer downtown in the mucks. Roxanne was going to collage to get a double degree in English and Social work.

As an adult she has become what most people call a bitch. She swears her mouth out very profoundly at nearly anyone and everyone. She is what most refer to as a slut, or a hooker even at times. Her motto is that she will do whatever it takes to get money, because since she has been on her own money has always been really tight. Even when she was married it was tight because her husband was a gambler, which soon made her into super bitch. Though there house was always clean and there was always great healthy food on the table.

past

Tammy was born in San Fransisco. She grew up with her twin sister Roxanne, her two older brothers and her parents who were Professors at a nearby university. Her parents were nearly never home and the two nannies always had there hands full with the other kids and seamed to accidently ignore Tammy. So while they were teaching her sister how to read and write she was out causing trouble, with her older brothers. They would take mud baths and have mud fights that enraged the woman terribly. They eventually gave up on her, going to concentrate on the other children. Ss soon as her brothers got serious about school and friends she was kicked aside. She ended up reading her fairy tail books all on her own from then on.

They always lived in the same place, and over the years as she got into elementary and jr high she watched the few friends that she did made come and go like the wind. She could never keep other friends for long, or keep in good long distant contact with other people so she always ended up finding herself alone. That was until high school. In the year between 8th and 9th grade something happened, and Tammy actually grew up (body wise) into a beautiful young woman. That was when she started to look just like her sister Roxanne. High school was great, lots of boys asking her on dates two of three times a week, going to every dance, and barely passing her classes. She had a blast.

As soon as high school was out her parents gave her a choice, stay at home and go to collage where they worked, or, if she did not go to collage be disowned. She choose the high road. Tammy did not believe that she could get through collage because she was always ratted out by her family, mostly by her parents, telling her that she was not smart enough. So she decided to move out. She moved into her eldest brother for a while, but after his wife found out that she was taking a job at a strip club as a cage dancer she was kicked out. She then went to live in several apartments most with bitches but every now and again with a boyfriend as well. Though neither would ever last long. Just like her five month marriage at nineteen.


present

At the beginning of the year a terrible car accident occurred. It took out half of her family and it took her three weeks to hear about it. This was because no one would tell her. Her mother, youngest brother and father were all killed in the crash. Her sister was seriously injured but continued on living, she was the one to come and tell her. Tammy was in shock, and helped her sister out to recovery. She assisted Roxanne her with her last leg of collage. Roxanne had an early graduation after turning in some assignments late. After such Tammy who had quiet her job moved in with her sister and they shared an apartment so they could both help each other out. Roxanne got a less stressful job soon after to pay the bills.

A month before the two were too move to New York so that Roxanne could start her dream job working as a social worker and helping people out in her own office another accident occurred. On a night that Tammy was out working at wal-mart for late nighters the apartment was broken into and it was a fatal scene. When she got to the apartment her sister had been taken away by ambulance and she never did see her sisters body again.

After the funeral, which was very small and only a few people came too, she walks up to the grave and notices something. The grave said her name on it, Tammy Cara Kane. That was when she got her great idea. Make a new life. She knew if she went back to being alone she would be in her old habits again, so she went home to what was left and packed. She would take her sisters place, go to New York start the business that was already set up for her and pretend to be Roxanne Baby Kane. Why? Because she was dead.

She switched places with her dead sister and is going too now live the life Roxanne wanted, with everyone believing she is Roxanne.

family
Mother – Cara Kane (dead)
Feather –Paul Kane (Dead)
Brother- Tom Kane (Elementry school teacher in San Marco
Brother- Paul Jr. (dead)
Twin sister- ‘Roxanne Kane’ “dead”
likes Fairy Tale books, Men, dancing, cooking, and cleaning
dislikes Filth, unhealthy food, most any other kind of book, living with other woman who are bitches, going through more then two boyfriends in a month.
other notes She is going to be a very bad Social Worker

...literature*

book title Wizard of Oz (Roxy: A book about me? Me: Nope Roxy: What!!!?!?!?!?)
backstory Roxanne? What does she have to do with the Wizard of Oz? Oh! Wait! You want to know who the Wizard of Oz is? Well he is the big hauncho! The big bad ass XD No, jkjk. She(haha)/He is the man who flew in on a hot air ballon to oz on accident and the people in oz loved him and named him there Wizard, he is the watcher of all the land, he helps the coward lion with his courage and the heartless tin man find his heart. In other words, he likes to help people out!

...roleplayer*

name Alez!!!
age huh wht?
gender female
rp experience lots ;D
how you found ouac Caution 2.0 was looking for characters aps XD
rp sample Already given!

[MOLLY]

♠ P E N D I N G ♠

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Alrighty, the character seems like she would be very interesting and everything. There are just a few things that need to be done.

Pictures must be under 500 pixels, because otherwise they stretch the board. I suggest getting a photobucket, and using their edit function, if you cannot find a suitable one.

Next, there area great deal of run on sentences and punctuation errors. For instance:

Tammy was always an energetic girl, though she was never able to concentrate on school work or any kind of work what so ever she was someone that was said to have no skill sets.

This should be:

Tammy was always an energetic girl. Though she was never able to concentrate on school work, or any kind of work whatsoever, she was someone that was-said-to-have, no skills sets.

See?

Also, there is a difference between 'THERE' and 'THEIR'. As well as 'THEY'RE'.

There: "Hey, look at that tree over THERE."

Their: "Take THEIR bikes over by that tree."

They're: "THEY'RE (They are) by the tree."


Next, it would be nice if you could specify whether she was in school or not. Since she is becoming a social worker, which requires college, I would assume yes. But you have adult listed as her grade. So, please clarify this.

Deborah Ann Woll has blue eyes, and it is important to stick to your canon's appearance when making them. If you want someone with red hair and green eyes, I'm sure their are people in the c-box who would love to help.

Under her name, her birth name needs to be listed. Then under nicknames, put the name she goes by. This will limit confusion when reading her past.

Another confusing thing is the cage dancing. I didn't see that in her past or present, but it's in her personality. If it were a minor event, that would be fine, but as it causes her to get disowned from her family, it should be included.

And, though this really isn't that big of a deal, 'Normal looking' isn't a distinctive trait. N/A would work, in it's stead.

So, just go through her app and make those edits. If you need any help, the staff would be more than happy to assist.

oxoxoxo,
Molly

[MOLLY]

Tammy was always an energetic girl. Though she was never able to concentrate on school work, or any kind of work whatsoever, she was someone that was said to have no skills sets. Which was very true, she was never good at anything, as child. She was and always spoken down to by her parents, while her twin was Miss Perfect. It was true, she was not good at any one thing. She had small skill sets for many things, though. In time she became very good at cleaning, and at cooking. But Her parents always overlooked that. They thought you had to be extra smart, like her sister Roxanne. and be as beautiful as her too. (<--- that sentence doesn't make sense, as the girls are so identical that they cannot be told apart.)

Going into high school, her and her twin sister became even more different. Even though They both suddenly became very popular. (<----small issue with this sentence, only because: Were they unpopular before?) Tammy was a cheerleader (I suggest adding an activity that made Roxanne popular. Just for good flow.). Finally having grown into their her own good looks, she and her sister became hard to tell apart. and were constantly unable to be told apart and thought to be the other. (<---This sentence is only repeating the prior sentence.) The only time they would be told apart was when Tammy was in her cheerleader costume and Roxanne was in her decathlons shirt. Two different crowds and two different people as high school ended, they went their there ways never speaking. Tammy, all but shunned from the family, she was left out on her own. She And went into a life as a cage dancer downtown in the mucks. Roxanne is going to collage to get a double degree in English and Social work.

As an adult she has become, what most people call, a bitch. She swears her mouth out very profoundly at nearly anyone and everyone(?) and has been called a slut or hooker at times and she is what most refer to as a slut, or a hooker even at times. Her motto is that She will do whatever it takes to get money, because since she has been on her own, and money has always been really tight. Even when she was married it was tight, because her husband was a gambler. This which soon made her into super bitch. Though their there house was always clean, and there was always great, healthy, food on the table.

It was much better! But, there was still some issues. You have to take your time, and comb through carefully. Don't get frustrated! I'm here to help!

xoxoxox,
Molly.

[MOLLY]

This App is over two weeks old. If you so wish to continue working on this app and it has not been re-reserved in your absence, one of the members of the staff would be more than happy to move it back to the application zone.
XOXOXO
Molly